STEP 1: INTRODUCTION

1. Paraphrase lại topic

The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

bar chart : bar graph

below: given

shows: illustrates

STEP 2: OVERVIEW

At first glance, what can be easily seen is that the younger employees’ work performances were affected more easily than the seniors. (22 words)

STEP 3: BODY

1. Brain storm

Độ dài lý tưởng là từ 5-7 câu

Có thể tiếp cận theo 2 cách:

Theo độ tuổi: Ta sẽ phân thành 2 khu với 2 biểu đồ riêng biệt; và tách biệt phân tích từng phần (Biểu đồ lược giản chỉ còn 1 nhóm tuổi)

Ưu: Dễ phân tích

Khuyết: Sẽ rất dài khi phải phân tích tiếp nhóm tuổi thứ 2

Theo category của vấn đề: Ta sẽ khoanh vùng và tập trung so sánh từng loại một

Recommended ideas: (Giải quyết theo category)

Từ dẫn	Ideas
To take a look at _________, It is obviously observed that________	Team spirit, Work environment Both age groups exact equivalent
When it comes to _________,	Competent boss, Respect from colleagues Senior higher
In term of ___________,	Job satisfaction, Money Younger higher
Last but not least, _____________	Chance.., Relaxed..., Promotion..., Younger extremely higher

To take a look at how Team spirit and Work environment affected employees, It is obviously observed that the percentage of both age groups were exact equivalent (65% and 30% respectively). When it comes to Competent boss (over 50%) and Respect from colleagues (45%) that influenced in seniors, There is no denying that it was a bit higher than the younger. It stark contrasts to Job satisfaction (55%) and Money (73%) in seniors which was slightly less than the younger. Last but not least, Chance... (90%), Relaxed...(80%), Promotion...(80%), showed a great disparity which the younger was significantly higher (98 words) ⇒ 160 words

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